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 Furthermore, when it comes to families, nothing is really more important than the children, just like at schools. And just like at schools, children should be properly guided throughout their lives. Children living in families should not be raised in an environment in which the idea of genders are nonexistent or are complicated to conform to social ideologies that stand against the status quo. “Canadian Mother Raising ‘Genderless’ Baby, Storm, Defends Her Family’s Decision” is an article by Linsey Davis and Susan Donaldson James and it talks about how a baby named Storm is being raised in a “genderless environment.” Storm’s parents have decided to keep their child’s gender hidden until Storm is older and to raise Storm and the other children in an environment where the idea of gender is not expressed. While many child development experts praise the controversial choice of Storm’s parents, there are some that disagree, such as Dr. Eugene Beresin, who is a director of training in child and adolescent psychiatry at Massachusetts General Hospital, “‘To raise a child not as a boy or a girl is creating, in some sense, a freak [. . .] It sets them up for not knowing who they are [. . .] To have a sense of self and personal identity is a critical part of normal healthy development [. . .] Identity formation is really critical for every human being and part of that is gender [. . .] There are many cultural and social forces at play.’” (14-21). Dr. Eugene Beresin's point clarifies how gender identity is vital for children to develop. Parents should not try to create an environment absent of genders, but should instead support children and the gender they are born with. In an article written by Patricia Edmonds, “Helping Families Talk About Gender,” she exemplifies the importance that gender identities and roles play in shaping a child’s personality. She explains how parents should introduce gender to their children, “What parents can do: All children need the opportunity to explore different gender roles and styles of play. Ensure your young child’s environment reflects diversity in gender roles and opportunities for everyone.” (3). While it's important to support the gender of a child that they were born with, it is also important to enlighten children of the opposite gender. If children aren’t knowledgeable about the opposite gender, then they start developing unrealistic thoughts and usually develop some resentment towards the opposite gender. In Lisa Belkin’s “What is Good for the Kids,” she brings up in her article that homosexual parenting doesn’t have major effects on children and in some way are better than hetrosexual parenting. One of the cases that Belkin provides is how, “lesbian mothers [. . .] tend not to divide chores and responsibilities according to gender-based roles, Goldberg says, ‘because you have taken gender out the equation. There's much more fluidity than in many heterosexual relationships.’” (13). Belkin’s notion is that the more reduction there is of gender-based roles, the better it is for children. However the exception is that not all gender-based roles are inherently bad for boys and girls. There are many things boys and girls naturally like to do and don’t like to do. It’s similar to how most men don’t mind seeing gory images, but girls do mind. Gender is as important in families as it is in school, which is why gender must not be kept away from households. Instead, parents should be actively informing their children on what gender is and how it applies to them.